Christopher Columbus realized that the decisive moment was approaching.
This raises a question or two, but only barely do I care. By the end of the first paragraph though, I'm losing interest with the history lesson.
Chapter One
Tom Sagan gripped the gun.
It sounds thrilling, but having a gun doesn't hook today's generation like it did with grand dad's generation.
First line of paragraph two:
He simply did not want to live any longer.
Then we get a Tom Sagan bio, which I'm hoping will be an obituary. It's sad and boring, you can skip most of it by reading key sentences (usually first in paragraph) that stand alone like this:
He'd once been an investigative reporter...
Tom received his third Pulitzer nomination...
They took his back.
Then his father disowned him.
Then his divorce.
Finally his firing.
Self-pity was his intoxication.
Would anyone even care he was gone?
What would it be like to be dead?
Time to end this.
Women. Another failure.
But he failed at sports, too.
He brought the barrel to his temple.
The metal touched his skin.
Rap, rap, rap.
A man stood outside the front window.
...held a photograph...
He knew the face.
His daughter.
Right. Chapter two begins with the daughter bound and gagged. We assume Daddy won't blow his brains out just yet. No surprise there - another false climax.
First thing said:
"Admiral."
Verdict: Fail
Sincerely,
Rudy Globird
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