I'm assuming this is a prologue, though it is not identified as being anything. It raises a mildly interesting question: what project? But without more to go on, one can't say one is hooked. So since this line isn't really great, I'll give this a second chance with the next section (chapter 1?).
There is no Internet here, not even dial-up.
In today's world this is a major catastrophe. Conflict galore. Reading on and between the lines, the reader can't help but feel there's a secret behind the plot in this book, though it's a little frustrating - as a mystery and hook are dangling before our eyes but obstinately refusing to reveal it early.
First thing said:
"I'm scared."
This is on the first page and part of a video call so that counts as a phone call opening, but better from a writer's point of few because there is more to work with as both characters can usually see each other and react to facial expressions and so on.
Verdict: Pass (barely)
Sincerely,
Theodore Moracht
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