Dr. Greg Moran was pushing three-old Timmy on the swing in the playground on East Fifteenth Street in Manhattan, not far from the apartment.
This is the first sentence and paragraph of the prologue. It is a short prologue of two pages and I skipped to the second page after reading this boring opening sentence to learn that another prologie dies in front of Timmy. At least there is a crime early on in this crime novel.
Chapter 1:
Laurie Moran looked out the window of her office on the twenty-fifth floor of 15 Rockefeller Center.
There certainly is a lot of effort to reveal the right addresses of the scenes in both these opening lines; nothing artistic mind you, just a GPS type announcement that;s supposed to help the reader navigate, though readers who know nothing about New York will not care what address these things are happening at. The opening paragraph of chapter 1 is rounded out with a weather report and skaters.
First thing said:
"Two-minute warning."
Verdict: Fail
Sincerely,
Theodore Moracht
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