Heart pounding, I crawled toward the brick angling down to form the edge of the recess.
Thus begins a rather intense conflict-riddled scene of a chase, though it's a little confusing at first. It's a scene filled with hate, violence and lots of cursing. No surprise that it's a prologue, which are usually violent and out of proportion to the rest of the story. But does a scene of a sadistic maniac repeatedly punching a girl senseless before being shot hook? What kind of person reading this would say, "Yeah, I'm getting into this!"
Chapter 1:
I've been held prisoner before.
The first paragraph ends with: But this captivity exceeded all others for pure physical pain.
It turns out, the narrator is not being held prisoner on some lonely farm with Robbie the Rodent Rapist Redneck, but is in a courthouse. In other words, this opening employs the: Ha-ha, made you look hook.
First thing said:
Insults, cursing and violent threats.
Verdict: Fail
Sincerely,
Theodore Moracht
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